General Theme : Watch Narrow : The electronic watch. Specific : The features of electronic watch. Thesis Statement : There are many advantages of using the electronic watch to help people manages their life better and avoid from doing the mistakes. Topic Sentence 1 : The physical appearances of electronic watch is very attractive. Topic Sentence 2 : The functions of electronic watch is according to our life. Topic Sentence 3 : The special applications of electronic watch to give ease in peoples' daily life.
1. Your specific focus should be an actual model of the electronic watch. 2. Thesis statement should focus on DESCRIPTION. 3. Topic sentence 1 is ok. Topic sentences 2 and 3 could be combined, for the third paragraph.
Correction: Data 1
General Theme : Watch Narrow : The electronic watch. Specific : The features of Casio G-Shock electronic watch. Thesis Statement : The Casio G-Shock is a model of electronic watch which have a very attractive features where the usage of this watch will makes peoples' life easier.. Topic Sentence 1 : The physical appearances of Casio G-Shock electronic watch is very attractive. Topic Sentence 2 : The functions of Casio G-Shock electronic watch is according to our life. Topic Sentence 3 : The methods to use of Casio G-Shock electronic watch is very simple and ease people life.
Essay of Technical Description
Watch is very important for people to manage their daily time more efficiently. The varieties of watch in market have the same functions but some applications make the watch really unique. Casio G-Shock is the watch which is invented in this era. Casio G-Shock is a model of electronic watch which has many attractive features where the usage of this watch will make peoples’ life easier.
The physical appearance of Casio G-Shock electronic watch is very attractive. The durable black watch case have a wide 45mm and matching with the black resin sport strap. The face of this watch has two windows. Furthermore, the bottom window shows time and the top window shows date. This watch also acts as circular display for the stopwatch function which can measure events down to 1/100 of a second for the first 60 minutes. It has two buttons at the left side and two more buttons at the right side of the watch. The buttons are Split.Reset, Start.Stop, Adjust and Mode.
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Besides the function to manage time, it also has other application such as countdown timer with 24-hour range. Furthermore, it has multi-function alarm, hourly time signal where it can be turned off, and 12/24 hour format. Besides that, it also has an auto calendar which function until 2039. Then, it has afterglow backlighting and water resistance until 200 meters depth in the sea. This function makes G-Shock suitable for scuba diving sessions.
These buttons have their own application. First, the button is Split.Reset. The usage of this button are to reset any activities in watch programming and for the stopwatch application, this button is used to take 1st-2nd place time. Second, the button is Start.Stop. This button functions as the pointer of start and end of stopwatch application. Third, the button is Adjust. This button really important to set any changes made on the watch. It acts for each changes like to adjust the time, date and calendar. Fourth, the button called Mode. This button is where the adjustment segments either to stopwatch or adjusts the time and dates are begun. (Refer Figure 1)
The G-Shock model provides better appearances for consumer, a variety of applications and makes the people ease to operate this watch without any inconveniences. Your time management will become more efficient with there are also some other important applications provides in Casio G-Shock digital watch.
Data 1
General Theme : Watch
Narrow : The electronic watch.
Specific : The features of electronic watch.
Thesis Statement : There are many advantages of using the electronic watch to help people manages their life better and avoid from doing the mistakes.
Topic Sentence 1 : The physical appearances of electronic watch is very attractive.
Topic Sentence 2 : The functions of electronic watch is according to our life.
Topic Sentence 3 : The special applications of electronic watch to give ease in peoples' daily life.
1. Your specific focus should be an actual model of the electronic watch. 2. Thesis statement should focus on DESCRIPTION. 3. Topic sentence 1 is ok. Topic sentences 2 and 3 could be combined, for the third paragraph.
Correction:
Data 1
General Theme : Watch
Narrow : The electronic watch.
Specific : The features of Casio G-Shock electronic watch.
Thesis Statement : The Casio G-Shock is a model of electronic watch which have a very attractive features where the usage of this watch will makes peoples' life easier..
Topic Sentence 1 : The physical appearances of Casio G-Shock electronic watch is very attractive.
Topic Sentence 2 : The functions of Casio G-Shock electronic watch is according to our life.
Topic Sentence 3 : The methods to use of Casio G-Shock electronic watch is very simple and ease people life.
Essay of Technical Description
Watch is very important for people to manage their daily time more efficiently. The varieties of watch in market have the same functions but some applications make the watch really unique. Casio G-Shock is the watch which is invented in this era. Casio G-Shock is a model of electronic watch which has many attractive features where the usage of this watch will make peoples’ life easier.
The physical appearance of Casio G-Shock electronic watch is very attractive. The durable black watch case have a wide 45mm and matching with the black resin sport strap. The face of this watch has two windows. Furthermore, the bottom window shows time and the top window shows date. This watch also acts as circular display for the stopwatch function which can measure events down to 1/100 of a second for the first 60 minutes. It has two buttons at the left side and two more buttons at the right side of the watch. The buttons are Split.Reset, Start.Stop, Adjust and Mode.
Besides the function to manage time, it also has other application such as countdown timer with 24-hour range. Furthermore, it has multi-function alarm, hourly time signal where it can be turned off, and 12/24 hour format. Besides that, it also has an auto calendar which function until 2039. Then, it has afterglow backlighting and water resistance until 200 meters depth in the sea. This function makes G-Shock suitable for scuba diving sessions.
These buttons have their own application. First, the button is Split.Reset. The usage of this button are to reset any activities in watch programming and for the stopwatch application, this button is used to take 1st-2nd place time. Second, the button is Start.Stop. This button functions as the pointer of start and end of stopwatch application. Third, the button is Adjust. This button really important to set any changes made on the watch. It acts for each changes like to adjust the time, date and calendar. Fourth, the button called Mode. This button is where the adjustment segments either to stopwatch or adjusts the time and dates are begun. (Refer Figure 1)
The G-Shock model provides better appearances for consumer, a variety of applications and makes the people ease to operate this watch without any inconveniences. Your time management will become more efficient with there are also some other important applications provides in Casio G-Shock digital watch.